Interesting.

I enjoyed it. For some reason your vocal style reminds me a bit of Robert Smith from The Cure, but thats plus in my opinion. I would only suggest that maybe if you could add a darker edge with atmospherics, and maybe have it downbeat... but that would be a whole new song, and it would be playing to my preferences rather than yours =P. Your lyrics are fine, but I think it would be more interesting if they were cryptic ^.^

Not bad at all. 7/10